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John Hicks's avatar

I'm using this for an ekphrastic poem on a Hopper painting.

10 poetry notebooks's avatar

How did that work out for you?

John Hicks's avatar

I'm a slow writer, but it's working.

10 poetry notebooks's avatar

Great! Everyone has their own timeline. :)

teatablepoet's avatar

Lovely insight. Thank you

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"Removing these hands from an endeared face

Force away the grime, dust, distrusting rustic flusters"

To air so thin vision blurs

Hair frets skin and prickling is the pun of skin

Sleepy goes the endorphins

Daze, daze haze the way.

For yet we sleep through, another day?

10 poetry notebooks's avatar

Hi! Thanks for sending this concise poem. I find the verbs strong which is a great choice for all your writing. They give the poem movement and clarity. Good question at the end? I like how you address it openly as if to all. It is an important questions.